I’m usually not too good at adding good looking text to my ads, but I was pretty proud of these but I’m not too sure on how to improve it.
Feedback is appreciated!
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I like both of them. My own issue in the 1st one is that the text “Command the Prison” and “Paying Officers” don’t pair well together and are confusing. It would be better off if they were on opposite sides of each other. Other than that, the word art looks great! 
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Nice ads, but I have some feedback:
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On the first ad, it is unclear what “Paying Officers” means (are you paying the officers, or do you mean playing as the officers?).
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The first render is also low quality, and the word “prison” is off-center.
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On the second ad, the word “now” is slightly off-center.
Don’t get me wrong, I love your ads, keep up the good work! 
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The first one is pretty good. It tells you exactly what the game is about, like an ad should do. However, with the second one, it isn’t obvious what exactly the game is about. I believe you’ll get a higher CTR with the second one if you added what the game is about in a condensed form.
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The paying should have the same shadow and font as officers, just different color.
If they really pay you for paying officers I will eat my shirt (They do not)
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it’s what the client wanted, i honestly do not know what he means by that
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I understand that, I do not blame you, just use the same shadow and font at officers and paying.
Edit: I also think the neon pink text should be darker.
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Your ads look very good, like the different style you went for each both of them. I think they look decent overall the second render, the “Now” text looks a little to big then the play text you could maybe make that the same as the other one. And the characters hat looks a little to bright, as well you could maybe add one of those icons to. Tell what the game is as showed on the first ad!
Overall, you have done a great. Job on both of them keep up the good work!!
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First ad is a lot more attractive. I feel the first ad would have a higher CTR. The 2nd ad is a bit more confusing and the text is a bit more difficult to read.
I think the art on the both of them is amazing! The colors caught my eyes and everything imo seemed to work well together. That’s what I look for in an ad, nice work!
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They look pretty good, the only thing is the work now is off center, (previously said). Other than that they look good! 
“Paying Officers” is not a good idea, because it may mean that players “get paid in robux” which i’m sure is against roblox’s TOS
i do not know what the commission meant by that so idk
Love them both, especially the renders. Except for some parts, for number 1, looks a bit odd to me, possibly due it being a bit off-centered to me. Number 2, there’s no quite clear explanation what this game should be / look like.
I hope I helped,
- M_xpDev
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Both are very good, second one could be slightly improved however, add more detail to it.
If your making this for Stateview then don’t. Stateview was told that they are no longer allowed to be a group on Roblox and they continuously make more because Roblox keeps banning it.
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He isn’t. Rez also has not made any Stateviews since he was banned. He does follow ToS. He founded the prison group genre, and a lot of new prison groups are trying to come up.
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I understand, but then your saying that someone is stealing the Name of Stateview and remaking it.
Exactly, Stateview as a group owned by rez allowed, but the name and group can be used/made by other developers.
Those are very good. Keep up the amazing skills you do.