Abandoned Pool Showcase

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#1

Hi. I made this showcase because it came to my head and i thought it was a very cool idea. It took me 5 to 6 days to make it. Feedback is more than apreciated]

This is the place if you want to enter by yourself Abandoned Pool (Showcase) - Roblox

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Im very proud of the work that i made. :slight_smile:

PD: Everything is mine except of the trees and some of the graffitis.

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#2

Howdy!

Heres some feedback after a few minutes playing!
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Spawn

  • Maybe change up the fence texture for one with the links smaller and possibly grey.

  • I can just barely slip past the fence, extend the wall a bit closer to avoid that.

  • Some of the graffiti contrast a bit too much. I think it would be better if you change the transparency of some of the more brighter colors.

  • If you make the surveillance camera hanging that may be a nice touch.

  • IDK how I feel about the tags being on the floor, it may look better if you take them out and keep the tags on objects and not directly on the environment.

Looks nice and overgrown.

Buildings

  • In the bathroom maybe corrode some of the toilets’ and take some out.
  • Add Sinks

Keep some of the concrete floor opposed to using the cobblestone texture as a floor in the buildings. You should still have some foliage sticking out from the floors by making cracks and open areas on the flooring.

Pool and General

  • The green of some of the models(sun chairs) could possibly be changed back to a greenish wood color, and you can also break some parts of the chair, change the angles of it to make it look worn down that way.

If they are not made out of wood you should keep it as a dirty white plastic color.

  • The pool looks huge. Not particularly a bad thing just an observation.

  • The slope of the pool should be higher towards the front. Or you can make it into more of a U shape.

  • Waves should just be still/slower since this is stagnant water.

  • The pool could also use a concrete rim, so it doesn’t look just like a hole in the ground.
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    Overall this looks pretty well made, just with a bit of tweaking and polishing you should be good! :happy3:
    -Sail

#3

Thank you very much for your feedback. I will do that and se if it makes it better and it probably will. Thank you a lot. Very apreciated you are helping me a lot.

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