Critique my train!

I made this train for my game today! I’ll like some feedback on it! :slight_smile:

It’s nowhere near done lol


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Super solid train, I like it The inside is nice and sleek, maybe could add some red on the inside to match the rest of the building, the building complements it nicely however. Fantastic build, great work.

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Very nice work as usual! I see that you already added vertical poles on the inside, however, I suggest you add some horizontal hand rails up near the lights. I would also add some storage compartments near the vertical hand rails. Other than that, keep up the good work!

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Now make it move heh. I would suggest creating points then treating the train as a collection of pipes in a sense.

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When I first clicked this thread I saw the work without seeing who uploaded it and I instantly recognised the style and who made it :sunglasses:

I feel like the seats could use a bit more detail - maybe something to divide the seating spaces up? They just look a little bit long and empty.

As for everything else it’s all very well constructed and it’s a decent start. You’ve more or less nailed the shape of the train. The textures are also well placed.

Also, I know you didn’t really ask but the rest of your map also looks pretty solid. As always, nice work.

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Great build!
But I suggest changing the textures, it would look better without the fabric texture.
Otherwise, I love the lighting! Great work :happy1:

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The only train i would ever enjoy riding.
Nice build. Color choice is perfect

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MASS REPLY

I will be adding more to this post too!


@CharlieValognas
I added a little bit more contrast to the train. I’ll make sure to add more soon. :wink:

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@Dev_JayR
I added the the horizonal hand rails! I’m not too sure about adding the storage compartments though, as I’m limited on space. Sorry!

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@CoderHusk
I have no experience with coding, so I won’t be adding that to my build. I really with I had it though!


@sou_p

I’m flattered. :blush:

I may add some dividing lines along the seats. Thanks for the suggestion!


@LandofLee1620
I changed the material to sand. Personally, I think it looks too plain for the build. I think the fabric material adds the perfect amount of texture and contrast. What do you think?

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@ImTheBuildGuy
That is simply the way I build. Just think of the potted plant as a potted tree instead :wink:

I defiantly agree with you, I may change it to glass and add some foodies inside. :candy:

I am actually working on that right now! Thanks for the suggestion!


@cartel_c and @antojensob
Thank you for the kind words! :blush:


Attention everyone! I changed the material of the floor from metal on concrete. How does it look now?

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Yeah the fabric is way better then the sand, the sand look too smooth for a build like this.

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I totally agree with you. It doesn’t look right. And fabric does look much better, but I think the fabric texture needs to be smaller (I know it’s not possible with the default textures).

I do really like your build though! :happy4: It’s amazing what you’ve done.

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This train is by far the best I’ve seen. The lighting inside of it is amazing, as well as the shading. I think you did a fantastic job on this one!

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Cool! This is kind of minor, but, the plant does not fit in just at all. The plant doesn’t look like a potted plant, it looks more like a tree, it has a square pot for some reason, and the realism of it just… it sticks out like a sore thumb!


I also feel like the vending machine glass shouldn’t just be a white void, and/or maybe like a bit transparent or reflectance.


These types of trains at what seems to be an airport also normally have glass in their doors, and fit a bit more with Metal than DiamondPlate material, and have a darker middle piece, like a full black not just gray/grey.

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I love the overall aesthetic and look, but my only only feedback is to make the rug in the station a little less plain. Mabey add a logo or some trash (it being a train station).

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It kind of looks like a mix between the London Tube train and an NYC subway train. Not bad.

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Wow this looks amazing! With the new realism updates coming out I’m sure you can make this look even more stellar!

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I bet the update will be coming by next month. :wink:

It’s already here :sunglasses:
Sorry for the bad video I couldn’t find the game so I linked a random guy’s youtube video.

I saw that game already, the materials are still the default. The only thing that Is out are clouds.

My studio:

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Oh okay. By any chance are you planning on making a game out of this train? Also you said it is WIP so are there any updates?

Nope.


Latest update:

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