Hi all!
I had my first attempt at making a game trailer for my new game; I would love to hear your feedback and suggestions to improve please:
Here is the trailer: ROBLOX PLS FUND - OFFICIAL GAME TRAILER - YouTube
(Credits to @aetypic for the brilliant Voice Acting in the trailer!)
Thank you for your time!
– Aws
I really like it, but the narrator sounds a bit boring and monotone. There is also no music to make the trailer more interesting.
Thank you for your feedback! I will look into adding some background music although I was worried about drowning out the voiceover.
the narrator sound depressed and the trailer is generally uninteresting, you should make it more exciting.
If I scale this video down to be about the size it’d appear on a Roblox page, all of the text throughout the video is a bit small.
make it BIGGER! you got plenty of room to expand
The narration is a bit monotone, but I think it just needs more background sounds. Button click effects, a small sound track, maybe some chi ching 
money noises
Otherwise you got a great base and I like it.
Good job 
Pretty good, You got straight to the point with it and described everything about the game instead of just a video with no commentary and just shots of the game…
Needs music. Other than that good.
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Its more of a tutorial than a trailer and the font on ui isnt that good, as the UI is cartoony while the font is meant to be like a bit sci-fi or FPS game-ish.
The trailer looks great but heres thing that can imrpoves your trailer
Here’s a few fonts I recommend that you can currently use in Roblox.
Also currently your text is just too much 2D! Ever heard of a drop shadow?
Thank you so much; this is very helpful feedback!
Welp, No problem! I thought I was being critical lol.
No problem! keep up! make sure to message me if the game got release!
The game has been released - we are just working on some new updates 
Thank you for your interest!
