For your first attempt it looks pretty good but it has a few problems: it uses pillow shading, which most of the time doesnโt look great (although in some cases it can be intentional), so maybe try a different method of shading. Also the shirt is a bit hard to make out, as itโs kinda overlayed by the arms, so i recommend you try and define the shirt a bit more (also add a bit more detail to it). My honest rating is probably 4/10, but that could easily go up after a few alterations.