My tutorial not enough!?

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robloxapp-20221113-0214312.wmv (2.1 MB)
Hello! I created a tutorial like this. But mobile players don’t get it

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The phone player visit length is too short should I change my tutorial design or style?

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The punctuation / grammar of the tutorial text can be improved. Also, it seems that the tutorial would be less than a minute long to complete. I don’t know if the problem is that the players don’t get it exactly, or that mobile players do not find the gameplay loop engaging overall. However, you could use metrics like GameAnalytics to find where mobile players drop off.

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I feel like it’s just the quality of the game. From that video, I can tell it’s just a bunch of meshes plastered around. I think the tutorial is fine, other then the grammar.