Need criticism regarding lore I've created for a game

[imnotaguest1121 (Diabolical_Subspace)]

Hello there.

I’ve created a simple lore for a game called ( Ɣoid * ). All I need is criticism and what I can do to improve the lore as the lore is pretty cliche.

"Roblox always had this pet peeve ever since they’ve been expanding and improving the Roblox platform. Around the year 2018, they wanted new users to learn Roblox about their more modern stuff like Rthro but they can’t since the majority of these new users learned Roblox simply because of their rich history.

Roblox was annoyed by this, so the administrator of ROBLOX Corp decided to devise a plan to force users into learning Roblox only because of “Classic Roblox”. That being to completely wipe their history (2007-2017) and lie about their release date.

How exactly? Simple, they decided to reuse some old Killbots and filled it with extremely outdated code since they didn’t even bother fixing the code and modify them to look like generic Brickbattle weapons, specifically the Bomb and Dodgeball. Afterwards, they send in an administrator disguised as a generic Old Roblox user delivering the Killbots to local battle stores.

Their plan was to simply fill many battle stores with these fake weaponry as possible so when they have enough Killbots to wipe the entire Old Roblox population and make sure their military will get overwhelmed by them. Both some classic and modern users realized what Roblox are doing and tried notifying the public but have been now terminated forever to avoid having their plan be ruined.

On the fateful day of November 15th, 2018, they activated the Killbots as they mercilessly terminate user by user and destroying iconic structures. As for the modern users, they where quickly aware and flooded the Roblox forums for them to stop but their efforts were in vain as Roblox threaten them to permanently be terminated forever and forced them to never speak about Old Roblox.

Once Roblox deemed everyone was considered “Dead” (Terminated), they decided to let the Killbots wander the now apocalyptic ROBLOXia just in case any old user has survive for some reason. Although remember about the outated code? Somehow, they turned them into Teramation’s. Teramations are simply mutated, glitched users who are trying to get revenge on Roblox but due to their mind being damaged because of the outdated code, they can’t tell if something is Roblox affilierated or not.

As for you, you are a revengeful user who’ll take back the former glory of Old Roblox and confront Roblox about their careless deeds."

yeah pretty cliche ig

TL:DR - Roblox wipes old roblox, old users become evil monsters, you try to bring back Old Roblox

[itmelevixkat (Levix)]

I think that there are some plot holes here. like how did the administrators delivering those killbots into local battle stores not get any suspicioun or inspection and why was the military never mentioned or told what happened to them after the activation of killbots. especially with the iconic structures you would think the military and other higher ups would protect and add heavy security to them since they are very important to the old roblox users. and the fact that the military cant beat outdated Killbots that literally has its code messed up is pretty goofy whats worse is that the military and old roblox users would have gears, gears that can protect them from killbots that terrible. but that seems to be out of this, which u can cover up by just saying roblox removed it or smth.

I also really think the reason for roblox wanting to remove old roblox and their history would have backfired from the beginning really hard and its completely unecessary to do and pretty generic, it could have been something more of a slow disappearance of old roblox as an example. and yeah you do have to switch some things up in this lore u wrote, because from what ive read the gameplay would feel like just another kill zombies and kill robots type of game but im not much to judge since this is probably only a piece about the lore that ive read.

[imnotaguest1121 (Diabolical_Subspace)]

Thanks for pointing out those plot holes, I didn’t even realize they existed (Not really much of a lore person). Anyway, I’ll be taking into consideration about what I’ve should’ve done for the lore and try fixing the plot holes. Thank you!