Maybe, try to make a scene, and setting camera CFrame to there, more realistic and better quality
The stances in which positions you have the characters and the text, remarkable. However, all in all, Iād like to think thereās room for improvement. Perhaps an increase of brightness would bring life to the image. Just seems rather gloomy to me. Aside from that, remarkable job. Keep at it. 
Good Job! I like how there is a star wars quote on the bottom of the loading screen! XD
I would like to see a loading bar, but otherwise, it gives me Star Wars Battlefront II (2005) vibes, which I think is a nice touch.
Iām a little confused about the āCreated by BenzGamingzā text at the top. I feel like itās not necessary, but then again, itās no big deal.
Only other thing I would mention is the lighting could be better, and the scene a little more lively (is there a fight going on? Because everyone is looking away from each otherā¦).
remove the ācreated by benzgamingzā and uh make a shadowing text by duplicating the text then setting the old textlabel Y offset to .4 or .5 depending on whatever scaling
Epic!!I I love it man, great job.