Hii!!!
I just made this I will later add another boat
(ps: I also do commissions )
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Love it and the detail, like the map and stuff, but the I’m not that keen on the front triangle part and the (feathers?) on the skulls aren’t really that clear, other than that great!
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2 options for you, I would recommend reading the long version as it gives more precise feedback and also ways to make a better looking boat.
Long
As it does have the general shape of a boat, its missing many things and has clashing styles which makes the model generally look bad.
The Bow
The front of the ship (The Bow) is usually curved and not just a flat wedge.
The Mast & Sail
Now, it appears you’ve built a Sloop, a boat with only 1 mast.
Now, the positioning of the mast and said are questionable to say the least.
As yes, it is high, the mast on sail ships are usually seen towards the middle of the boat.
(Image from the Sea of Thieves Wiki)
(Image of a Sloop from Wikipedia)
As you can see, the mast is most often placed in the middle of the ship, usually set closer to the front than the back.
The wheel position
The wheel (I’m not sure what else to call it) on a ship is towards the back on a high up spot.
Where you have placed your sail is where the wheel should go, and the sail should be placed slightly behind where the wheel currently is.
The sizing
Now, the ship is very small, too small in fact.
There is barely enough deck space for one person.
I would entirely rebuild the ship to be wider and longer as its just too small.
The second wheel on the side
Why is that there? It doesn’t look right to me.
The general appearance of the ship
Now, I’m going to be honest… It isn’t good looking at all and far from it.
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That bit of wood sticking out the back of the boat should be sticking out the front
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You should switch the flat wedges for multiple more wedges to get a smoother shape on the front.
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With the size of the ship you’ve built, the cabin you’ve made would make no sense to be there and would also probably sink the ship from its weight. (Have a look at the Sea of Thieves Sloop for reference)
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The railing
Its cool, but I would replace it with just a wood wall considering the size of the ship.
Something like a galleon would have the railing, but a sloop wouldn’t. -
The height of the ship.
With the height of the ship, theres no way it would float at all as there isn’t be enough space under the deck for it to float.
The clashing visual styles
Now, you have multiple styles on the ship that end up making it look bad.
First, the general shape. It looks like something out of 2015 roblox.
Second, the skulls are too realistic for the build.
Third, theres the same problem with the wheel, everything on that build should be made of basic shapes and not complex meshes, as it is very easy to distinguish what you’ve made and what other people have made.
Fourth, the sails.
To me, they appear to have a more cartoony style considering the flat and bright coloring, which again clashes with the skulls, the wheel AND the boat.
How would I rebuild it?
Personally, I would scrap everything you have and rebuild it from the ground-up.
First, I would build the hull in blender to get a good looking shape, and export everything out separately so I can give them all separate materials and colors in studio.
Second, I would then make the sails, masts and wheel in blender, and export them again, separately to do all coloring and material applying in studio.
Third and finally, after getting in studio I would then do finishing touches, adding details like lamps, tables and barrels to the boat.
In conclusion
It generally isn’t good, and personally, I wouldn’t hire you even for 30 robux.
Short
It looks bad in my opinion.
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Damn… kinda hurt my feelings with the short one
but thank you for the feedback I will read it right now!
Yeah, sorry for being a little harsh with things, but as someone who enjoys boats, I couldn’t help but point out everything I disliked about the build.
Again, I do give ways for you to make it better towards the bottom of the long feedback.
I’d like to see where your building journey goes, don’t give up and do learn how to use blender! It’s very useful and you’ll get good looking models from it once you’ve learned enough!
