Random Build...Shop in a Graveyard

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#1

Hi, I’m Hop_Jr and this is random, but I was inspired to make a shop in a graveyard. It’s not even near Halloween, however, I wanted to make something memorable and sp00ky, so I present my scene:

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I know it may be hard to see, so I will provide the game link. Also, please know that I am not finished, as this only took around 3 hours to make, if you have any suggestions/critiques, please comment them down below, and please be honest.

I look forward to the suggestions, thank you for reading!

–Hop_Jr :carrot:

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#2

Overall looks pretty alright, there is a few things I want to point out.

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  • There is Z-fighting on the chimney
  • The invisible walls around the area feel claustrophobic, I just be able to move around the area more
  • There isn’t any sound at all, so everything feels weird and it takes me away from the showcase
  • The whole thing feels too thin and should have more thickness to it.
  • A part of the shop is missing and it can be clearly seen by zooming out and looking through the door.

Overall it looks alright, but it still needs more work to make it better.

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#3

Thank you. And, I sort of made the side of the shop like that intentionally, but it seems to catch the viewers’ eyes, so I will finish it. As for the invisible walls, I added them for that exact reason, so when I finish with the shop, I will be sure to remove them. I did add sound, but I need to configure that. And thank you, I will consider your suggestions.