honestly the modelling is great, computer is too square, posing on dude is too sudden or kinda weird because it kinda looks lonely in dere. the plant in the background is too thin, the icing dripping makes it look like icicles, and there’s too much of that. the icing dripping is too sharp, instead of being more blobby like in the blender guru donut tutorial.
maybe put something actually on the computer screen, and make it clear that he is sitting on a chair cus i thought he was standing at first. also the happy birthday text needs more lighting, color changes, material changes, and modelling changes to make it look more like its hanging and not nailed onto the wall! also make it just one ‘happy birthday’ and center that.
just make some small backyard or whatever outside the window and fix the fact that there is no baseboard here
there is a tutorial, i used it and it turned out great. also the wall is too bland and so is the window frame, and tthe table looks like it has edges in it but the just disappear.
the floor texture looks weird in the only place you can see it:
and the candles on the cake are neon signs, and don’t have the fire on them.
now, the lighting. the lighting is too plain, and bland, a very dim lit room tbh. could be done better. maybe have one light on the top and one light from front and back for extra depth.
Ok the posing is suspose to be me like cheering and i am not sitting in a chair personally i think the icing is fine maybe a little bit less though i was gonna put a “Thank you dev forum for all the help this year” on the computer the computer was made back in may so its a old model the happy birthday thing is suspose to be on the little rope thing there suspose to be one big model also i didnt make a back window because i didnt know what to really put and its alot of work the table is suspose to have edges disapearing because its like it was chipped off i put more but you cant see them i did forget to put fire on the candles now the lighting i used a addon for that called “dynamic lighting” basically it makes a lighting skybox for you that you can ajust i didnt really ajust it because i figured it was fine for inside lighting the floor is suspose to be wood planks (probably should have actually modeled that instead of using a texture) and thank you!
last thing: cake has some kinda weird texture or cuts in it.
was this made in studio? if so try to use blender (easiest free 3d software i know of) or make better lighting