I’m actually going to go through some assets and finding some stuff so instead of submitting multiple replies I’ll just make this big one.
Item: Redcliff Cloak
Link to Item or Asset: (2) Redcliff Cloak - Roblox
Issue or corrected text: From the front, he looks like any other traveling villager. Those who see the logo know he is a brave warrior traveling to help all people from certain destruction.
Recommendation or corrected text: From the front, you’ll look like any other traveling villager. Those who see the logo know you are a brave warrior traveling to help all people from certain destruction.
Change “He” to “They” as anyone can wear this hood, it’s not specific to a gender.
Item: Redcliff Wall Smasher
Link to Item or Asset: (2) Redcliff Wall Smasher - Roblox
Issue or corrected text: No cities’ walls are strong enough to stop him. He will make way for his army to invade the city, and there is very little you can do to stop him.
Recommendation or corrected text: No cities’ walls are strong enough to stop you. You will make way for your army to invade the city, and there is very little people can do to stop you.
Change “He” to “you” or “Your” as done above.
Item: Redcliff Courage Bearer
Link to Item or Asset (2) Redcliff Courage Bearer - Roblox
Issue or current text: His position is largely honorary, but it is still important. After all, without the courage to drive into battle, how would anything be accomplished?
Recommendation or corrected text: Your position is largely honorary, but it is still important. After all, without the courage to drive into battle, how would anything be accomplished?
Change “His” to “Your”
Item: Paladin of the Splintered Skies
Link to Item or Asset (2) Paladin of the Splintered Skies - Roblox
Issue or current text: Is there one who is more renowned for his bravery than this man? If so, I should like to meet him.
Recommendation or corrected text: Is there one who is more renowned for their bravery than this person? If so, I should like to meet them.
Correct Male terms to Multi-Gender terms (he/him to their/person/them)
Item: Steadfast General
Link to Item or Asset (2) Steadfast General - Roblox
Issue or current text: He won’t lose a single man in this battle. His life depends on it.
Recommendation or corrected text: You won’t lose a single soul in this battle. Your life depends on it.
Use Multi-Gender Terms.
Item: Corinthian Guard
Link to Item or Asset (2) Corinthian Guard - Roblox
Issue or current text: All honor and glory is his to gain or lose.
Recommendation or corrected text: All honor and glory is yours to gain or lose.
not going to add this anymore, you know what im targeting at by now
Item: Roman Warrior
Link to Item or Asset (2) Roman Warrior - Roblox
Issue or current text: The best revenge is to be unlike him who performed the injury.
Recommendation or corrected text: The best revenge is to be unlike you who performed the injury.
Item: The Emperor’s Champion
Link to Item or Asset (2) The Emperor’s Champion - Roblox
Issue or current text: He’ll defend the mighty Emperor until the very end!
Recommendation or corrected text: You’ll defend the mighty Emperor until the very end!
Item: The Darkest Gladiator
Link to Item or Asset (2) The Darkest Gladiator - Roblox
Issue or current text: He fought the lion… and won!
Recommendation or corrected text: You fought the lion… and won!