Item: Lord of the Federation Link to item or Asset ID:Lord of the Federation - Roblox Issue or current text: The wars of unification are complete. The federation is whole once more. All of creation is yours. Recommendation or corrected text: The Wars of Reunification are complete. The Federation is whole once more. All of creation is yours.
Change ‘unification’ to ‘Reunification’ to be in-line with this item’s series & certain words should be capitalised to be in-line with this item’s series.
Item: Duke of the Federation Link to item or Asset ID:Duke of the Federation - Roblox Issue or current text: The wars of re-unification are complete. The federation is whole once more. All of creation is yours. Recommendation or corrected text: The Wars of Reunification are complete. The Federation is whole once more. All of creation is yours.
Change ‘war’ to ‘wars’ to be in-line with this item’s series & certain words should be capitalised to be in-line with this item’s series.
Item: Lord of the Tixeration Link to item or Asset ID:Lord of the Tixeration - Roblox Issue or current text: The wars of tixification are complete. The federation is whole once more. All of the tix are yours. Recommendation or corrected text: The Wars of Tixification are complete. The Federation is whole once more. All of the tix are yours.
Certain words should be capitalised to be in-line with this item’s series.
Item: Zeppelin Top Hat Link to item or Asset ID:Zeppelin Top Hat - Roblox Issue or current text: It’s hard for zeppelin enthusiast to find an appropriate hat. Recommendation or corrected text: It’s hard for zeppelin enthusiasts to find an appropriate hat.
The phrase “zeppelin enthusiast” should be plural. It could also be changed to “a zeppelin enthusiast”.
Item: Emerald Valk Shades Link to item or Asset ID:Emerald Valk Shades - Roblox Issue or current text: For when you’re ridin’…but you’re feeling green. Recommendation or corrected text: For when you’re ridin’… but you’re feeling green.
Item: Violet Valk Shades Link to item or Asset ID:Violet Valk Shades - Roblox Issue or current text: For when you’re ridin’…but you just wanna chill. Recommendation or corrected text: For when you’re ridin’… but you just wanna chill.
Item: 27th Century Centurion Link to item or Asset ID:27th Century Centurion - Roblox Issue or current text: When your sworn duty is to fight incorporeal demons made of pure engery, you’d better be able to see the entire EM spectrum. Recommendation or corrected text: When your sworn duty is to fight incorporeal demons made of pure energy, you’d better be able to see the entire EM spectrum.
Item: Beret Link to Item or Asset(2) Beret - Roblox Issue or current text: C’est le chapeau parfait pour les artistes! Recommendation or corrected text: Ç’est le chapeau parfait pour les artistes!
Incorrect C used.
Item: Royal Rabbit Ears Link to Item or Asset(2) Royal Rabbit Ears - Roblox Issue or current text: He’s the hoppin’ kind of the spring season. Recommendation or corrected text: It’s the hoppin’ kind of spring season
Confusing choice of words, even I was confused making a suggestion. Also usage of “He’s”
Item: Kitty Ears Link to Item or Asset(2) Kitty Ears - Roblox Issue or current text: MY EARS. LET ME SHOW YOU THEM. Recommendation or corrected text: MY EARS, LET ME SHOW YOU THEM!
Incorrect punctuation
Item: Mischief Tail Link to Item or Asset(2) Mischief Tail - Roblox Issue or current text: This guy looks like he’s up to no good. Recommendation or corrected text: This person looks like they’re up to no good.
Item: Optiscope 650 Link to Item or Asset(2) Optiscope 650 - Roblox Issue or current text: Sir, I’ve spotted the enemy. He’s at N 53° 32’ 6.1872", W 9° 53’ 19.9134". What are your orders? Recommendation or corrected text: Sir, I’ve spotted the enemy. He’s at your 6. What are your orders?
Change from actual coordinates to a position like 6.
Item: Valkyrie 3000 Link to item or Asset ID:Valkyrie 3000 - Roblox Issue or current text: In the future - all robots wear valkyries. The future doesn’t make sense. Recommendation or corrected text: In the future, all robots wear valkyries. The future doesn’t make sense.
Item: Valkyrie Helm Link to item or Asset ID:Valkyrie Helm - Roblox Issue or current text: This splendid helm is a replica of ones worn by the valkyries, a group of minor deities who serve Odin in Norse mythology. Led by Freya, they uphold justice and righteousness. Recommendation or corrected text: This splendid helm is a replica of ones worn by the Valkyries, a group of minor deities who serve Odin in Norse mythology. Led by Freya, they uphold justice and righteousness.
Item: Platinum and Sapphire Circlet of the Elven King Link to item or Asset ID:Platinum and Sapphire Circlet of the Elven King - Roblox Issue or current text: The Sapphire King rules the Blue Elves…the other kings make fun of him and call his elves Smurfs. The other kings are jealous of the Sapphire Elves’ powers. The benevolent Sapphire King knows this and ignores their comments. Recommendation or corrected text: The Sapphire King rules the Blue Elves… The other kings make fun of him and call his elves Smurfs. The other kings are jealous of the Sapphire Elves’ powers. The benevolent Sapphire King knows this and ignores their comments.
Item: Tin Pot Link:Tin Pot - Roblox Current text: It’s a cooking pot. It’s got a handle, but you’ll have to trust me on that. Recommended text: It’s a cooking pot. It’s got a handle, but you’ll have to trust me on that. Or you can just check the 3D view.
Reasoning: This description is outdated now that there is a 3d preview for items.
Item: Crescendo, The Soul Stealer Link to item or Asset ID:Crescendo, The Soul Stealer - Roblox Issue or current text: Forged with fiery flames and a demon’s eye the Crescendo ascends from its ancient sleep with a thundering tone.
Recommendation or corrected text:** Forged with fiery flames and a demon’s eye, the Crescendo ascends from its ancient sleep with a thundering tone.
Item: Chaos Master’s Wing Slasher Link to item or Asset ID:Chaos Master's Wing Slasher - Roblox Issue or current text: Man may not fly in your presence. Any person with wings will have them slashed by this sword and fall to their peril. As for your enemies on the ground, they’ll have a tough time escaping this swords speedy 24 damage hit. Recommendation or corrected text: Man may not fly in your presence. Any person with wings will have them slashed by this sword and fall to their peril. As for your enemies on the ground, they’ll have a tough time escaping this sword’s speedy 24 damage hit.
Change ‘swords’ to ‘sword’s’ to indicate possession.
Item: General Protection Fault Link to item or Asset ID:General Protection Fault - Roblox Issue or current text: General Protection Fault is a time-traveling war criminal from the future. He’s wanted on 14 worlds for various heinous acts. Despite the fact that surveilance is ubiquitious in many sectors of the galaxy, no one living has ever seen his real face. Recommendation or corrected text: General Protection Fault is a time-traveling war criminal from the future. He’s wanted on 14 worlds for various heinous acts. Despite the fact that surveillance is ubiquitous in many sectors of the galaxy, no one living has ever seen his real face.
Correct the spelling of ‘surveillance’ & ‘ubiquitous’ in the description.
Item: Pirate Mop Link to item or Asset ID:Pirate Mop - Roblox Issue: Mistakenly labeled as a gear while it should be a back accessory Recommendation: Change the category into a back accessory instead
Item: Noob Attack: Katana Khaos Link to item or Asset ID:Noob Attack: Katana Khaos - Roblox Issue or current text: Somehow a noob got his hand on a katana and he’s out for sweet bloxxy vengence. Don’t ask me how - I always put my katanas away when I’m done with them. Recommendation or corrected text: Somehow a noob got his hand on a katana and he’s out for sweet bloxxy vengeance. Don’t ask me how - I always put my katanas away when I’m done with them.
Item: Noob Attack: Ninja Nuisance Link to item or Asset ID:Noob Attack: Ninja Nuisance - Roblox Issue or current text: Ninja noobs are stealth (or at least as stealth as noobs can be). Be on the look out for ninja stars! Recommendation or corrected text: Ninja noobs are stealth (or at least as stealth as noobs can be). Be on the lookout for ninja stars!
Item: LOLHOW Link to item or Asset ID:LOLHOW - Roblox Issue or current text: This strange fruit is eaten mostly by noobs but sometimes even by veteran Robloxians. The question on their minds is HOW? No really, how?!
This hat came out of Reese’s Mystery Pony Pinata on April 16,2010 at 10:50 PM PDT. Recommendation or corrected text: This strange fruit is eaten mostly by noobs but sometimes even by veteran Robloxians. The question on their minds is HOW? No really, how?!
This hat came out of Reese’s Mystery Pony Pinata on April 16, 2010 at 10:50 PM PDT.