Hi there, I always enjoy listening to the compositions of fellow developers here on this fantastic platform, let me quickly analyze and critique your compositions real quick.
Your musical selections are acceptable but short and undeveloped at most. If you want to grow to your full potential in composition (which I know you can), you will need to extend your musical field of genre, length of compositions, and overall compositional style. Currently, you need an in-depth musical knowledge in order to write more advanced music, which is where you will most likely progress to soon.
Your strongest piece currently is the first one, “Destination”. For the style, it is acceptable. Your average player won’t mind it, but it is structurally weak overall. There is plenty of potential, let me break it down for you.
Chords and Voice-Leading
- Currently, the Chordal Structure is weak. The whole piece is set in G Major starting with the Tonic Scale-Degree [ I ] and switching back and forth from that to the Leading Tone [ vii* ]. So your Chord analysis sheet would like something like this:
[ I ] -> [ vii*] -> I ] -> [ vii*] -> I ] -> [ vii*] -> I ] -> [ vii*] -> I ] -> [ vii*] -> I ] -> [ vii*] -> and so on…
Not particularly exciting is it? Let me help you out with some common Progressions:
[ MAJ - iii -> vi -> [ii <-> IV] -> [V <-> vii*] -> I ]
[ min - III -> VI -> [ii* <-> iv] -> [v <-> VII] -> i ]
Because your piece is in a Major key, (G), why don’t we take the usual I to vii*, but from I again, we can go back to ii. This will create the illusion of going back to vii*, by taking advantage of the common tone between the chords (A & C) we can simulate vii* for about two measures before following the Chord Progression to possibly V and then I. Actually we can create some variation and make the V and seventh chord. Looking good so far!
Modulation
- When I mentioned your potential earlier with this particular piece, I meant potential for progressing the music itself. You have a very strong base to work off of. Your ability to use motives and phrases are expertly managed. But, you can give it a little push. From the vii* Chord that I mentioned earlier, we can actually modulate to D Major, due to its similarity to G Major (tonic). D Major is actually the Dominant Chord of G Major, which works out perfectly.
Aside from everything technical, all you need is a strong work ethic to power through the Chord Notations, which was the biggest issue. Everything else is great, I can tell that you are very talented in this field. Keep up the great work!
Regards,
Generic0001
